Published: Monday, July 23 2012 12:00 a.m. MDT
Miss Powers, your writing style is much more suited to prose than to journalism.
I'm sure you merely wanted your readers to connect with the story on a
human level, but the flowery diction and metaphors only serve to distract from
the story and come off as unprofessional. Perhaps you might try writing novels
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